Thank You! By Francesca

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“Hurry up, we are going to be late!” my dad was yelling, “Get your clothes on and let’s go.”
I quickly woke up with a yawn, I brushed my teeth while I was half way asleep. I put on my denim skirt and my red heart shirt. My dad told me that on March 4th 2009, was a very special day.
​As I was walking out of my nice warm room I was thinking, special day? What do we have to do that is so special? We got in the car as fast as lightning. I put my seatbelt on, and in no time we left. Again and again I was wondering what was happening. After five minutes I realized that my mom wasn’t there!
​BOOM, my light bulb went on! I remembered that my mom was giving birth to my baby brother! I was so astounded that I couldn’t stop smiling. I was smiling from ear to ear. We finally arrived at the hospital. All my family and friends were outside the door waiting to see my little brother.
​After a while my brother came out, I was the first on to see him. I went closer and closer and quickly ran to my dad. “Is that my brother?” I asked my dad and wondered. “Yes, he is,” he responded.
​My baby brother was crying so much that everybody could hear him. I gave my mom a big hug and told her this was the best present anyone could give me. “Thank you,” I told her. “Thank you.”

25 thoughts on “Thank You! By Francesca

  1. I loved your essay! This is one of the essays that have a message:no matter the size,it can still be a very interesting story. I liked your story because it had similes,and I liked the part when you said,’boom my lightbulb went on’. I also liked that you remembered everything,before sooo long. This was one of your greatest stories!:-)

  2. This is an awesome story and I liked the words you used like astounded and I like you put a picture of you and your baby brother. I loved your story alot

  3. Dear Francesca,
    I really loved your story!
    I think you did a really good job –and made us all hanging in suspense, thinking ,”Oh my God, Oh my God, what’s going to happen next?!”
    I think that you also did a good job when you were describing your feelings, and I felt that I was there, and was really wondering,”Why isn’t Mom in the car?”
    I think that you did an excellent job, and enjoyed reading your fantastic story!
    From, Your friend, Maggie D. 🙂

  4. Dear Francesca,
    Your story was sweet, amazing, and outstanding!! I thought you used a lot of details like describing what you were wearing, and how excited you were. It also had just the right amount of information. I can’t wait till you write another story.
    Your friend,
    Claire : )

  5. Dear Francesca,
    I think that you did a really good job. I liked that you also added a picture. It was cute and it really hooked your reader. I want to know what happened next. You should really add another story to the blog. Also you gave me an idea of what to write next. I also remember when my little sister, Zoe, was born like it was yesterday. Good job!
    Your friend Anna K. 🙂

  6. Dear Francesca,
    LOVED your picture , I also really liked how you described your feelings about your brother.
    You explained everything clearly.I like how you kept me focused on your story. SO CUTE and TOUCHING! Can’t wait for your next AMAZING story:) :*

  7. Dear Francesca,
    I love your story so much. You put in just the right amount of detail. I liked how your brother’s birth was a surprise! You and your brother look so cute. I can’t wait to read your other stories:)

  8. Dear Francesca,
    I love your story so much. You put in just the right amount of detail. I liked how your brother’s birth was a surprise! You and your brother look so cute. I can’t wait to read your other stories:)

  9. Dear Francesca,
    You did a great job writing your outstanding story! I really enjoyed reading the great amount of detail, similes, and emotion you included. You and your brother look adorable in the event in the picture! Really awesome story!
    Your friend,
    Anna B.

  10. Dear Francesca,

    That was so amazing! I’ m so happy for you. Your story was heart warming and I hope when you have your own blog you do something even better.

    Monroe M. 🙂

  11. Dear Francesca,
    I really liked your story and your picture. I wish I can read another one of your wonderful stories like this one. Also your little baby brother is very cute, as in the picture and as in real life. Please write another story.
    Emmanouil

  12. Dear Francesca,
    I really liked your story! I liked how you used really interesting words and I also liked it at the end that you put “Thank You!” I can not wait to read more!
    Love,
    Ellie T

  13. Dear Francesca,
    I loved your story and your picture! I think the topic you chose was great. You described it well and used interesting words. Can’t wait to read another of your great stories!:)
    Afroditi

  14. Dear Francesca ,
    I LOVED your essay about your baby brother and I could picture all of your moves and your feelings.

    Love,
    Angeliki 🙂

  15. Dear Francesca,
    I really liked your story and your picture! I liked the description that you used and I want to have a younger brother or sister.
    I hope to read more of your great stories.
    By Danae

  16. Dear Francesca,
    Great job !!!! I really liked the story about your baby brother!!! You were very descriptive on what you wrote and I really liked the picture of you and your brother!!!
    Again Great Job!!!
    Your friend,
    Maria:-)

  17. Dear Francesca,
    I really enjoyed reading your story! My brother was born when I was 3 years old, so I can’t remember how it feels. When I was reading your story, I could feel how exciting it was to me, even though it was talking about you. It was really sweet (your writing) and also you didn’t always say said.
    Your Friend,
    See Eun

  18. Dear Francesca, I liked your story a lot that your parents didn’t tell anything untill you arivied to the hospital. Maybe for next time I think you could have put more feelings about how you felt that day. P.S liked the the picture with your brother.

  19. Dear Francesca,
    I really liked your story and your photos! I can’t believe how your sweet brother has grown up so fast! keep posting great stories !
    Vaios

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